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如何选择一个有趣的esasy主题,Topic of Your Choice写作思路辅导

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如何选择一个有趣的esasy主题,Topic of Your Choice写作思路辅导

留学申请essay写的好与坏将直接影响着我们是否能够成功的被国外的大学所录取,那么要如何才能够写好一篇优秀的essay呢?这里我要强调的一点就是essay的主题非常重要,如果我们能够选择一个非常有趣的essay主题,这样便能够让招生老师们感到新意,从而获取好的评价,今天我就来辅导各位Topic of Your Choice的写作思路,教会大家如何去选择一个有趣的essay主题。

申请essay题目很多时候会遇到-Topic of Your Choice。那么这个题目应当怎么写?我们一般常见的思路就是用一件事或者一个经历来写?那么除此之外还有什么其他思路吗?

在申请美国大学时,通常都会用到美国大学通用申请系统Common Application,在填写其申请表格时,大多数申请学生通常会选择撰写表格上第一个essay题目,即Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you,或者是第六个essay题目,即Topic of Your Choice。申请学生愿意用这两个题目来描述自己亲身经历的、对自己有深刻影响的一件事或一段经历。

针对第六个题目,除了用一件事或一段经历来写作之外,其实还有另外一种思路来写出优秀的申请essay,那就是仅仅围绕学生个人的某一、二项突出的个性特质,将学生个人的数段经历按照一定逻辑进行编排,完成一篇essay的写作。为让同学们对此思路有感性认识,笔者就结合数月前指导一名学生的经历,简单介绍一下这种写作思路,同学们在写作这类申请essay时可以参考借鉴。

那天,笔者与那名学生面谈,帮助她梳理个人背景资料,挖掘写作素材,谈话持续两个多小时。为挖掘写作common表格上长essay的素材,我问她有什么事让她感到很自豪,她讲了一些让她感到自豪的事,,其中她谈到曾在语文课上做过一个口头陈述,是有关京剧的,受到同学和老师的好评。对京剧了解很多,是因为她曾在培训班学过五年多的京剧

我又问她是否遭受过磨难,她向我讲述了自己从小到大的种种不幸经历,其中因病导致她放弃自己业余活动的经历引起我的注意:小学时,这名学生曾苦练京剧,将来想报考中央戏剧学院当京剧演员,曾被选出来为外宾表演京剧,但练了五年后自己突患肾炎,在医生建议下不得不终止训练,京剧演员梦就此止步;痊愈后,这名学生喜欢上了游泳,苦练两年通过测试获得了两张国家认证的游泳证书,但又发现皮肤出现问题,查出患皮肤病,医生禁止她再接触水;之后,她选择利用课后时间到体校羽毛球队练习打羽毛球,期间曾参加区羽毛球比赛获少年组三等奖,直至上高中后由于离体校太远才终止练习。

听了她这段介绍,笔者脑海里首先感到这名学生确实有些不幸,厄运接二连三,但马上又意识到,她是一位顽强不屈的学生,也是一位做事认真、坚持不懈、勇于追求卓越的学生:她参加每项活动都十分认真地训练,并且一段时间过后都取得了一定成就。当厄运来临,让她不得不放弃一项活动时,她会很快找到另一项活动,并继续认真苦练,又会取得新的成就。根据她的经历,笔者按照她这些优秀的个性特征,将她看似不幸实则充分展示其亮点的几段经历串起来,帮助她设计了下面这篇essay的写作思路。她写出草稿后,又指导她认真修改,最终完成这篇essay的写作。下面,我们一起来看一下这篇essay,笔者在每一段后面做了简要的点评。

Misfortunes and Me
不幸和我

点评:以common表格第六个essay题目为题撰写好的essay,最好能够加上一个简短精练、起画龙点睛作用的标题。

Last semester, I made an oral presentation in the Chinese class.All the classmates clapped their hands heavily after I finished. “How do youknow so much about Peking Opera?” A classmate asked me surprisingly. Hearingthis, my heart began to hurt. For me, Peking Opera was a precious memory, but Ireally did not want to touch on the subject with ease.

点评:essay开头很巧妙地将第一个misfortune引出来:作者语文课上做了一个出色的口头陈述,受到同学们的热烈欢迎。而一名同学不经意的一问“你怎么知道这么多京剧知识”,碰到了作者的痛处——京剧是珍贵的记忆,但作者不愿轻易碰触。文章最后一句留下了一丝悬念——为什么作者不愿轻易碰触?而这正是作者设下的诱饵,吸引读者一探究竟接着读下去。

When I was about five years old, I was fascinated by Peking Operaand I dreamed to become an Opera actress in the future. Then I started learningit in a training class. The class started at six p.m., so I had to go thereimmediately after I finished my school every afternoon, no matter it was rainyor windy. I practiced three hours there, then went home and had dinner at abouthalf past nine. I felt exhausted after every training class, but my skills insinging and performance improved quickly and firmly. I was once chosen toperform for foreign guests three years later after I learned it. I thought mydream was drawing closer and closer. However, on a day when I was ten, I wassent to hospital and diagnosed with nephritis. The doctor suggested I have agood rest and terminate my Opera training because it would make my body worse.I felt very sad about that, after all, I had been training for it for fiveyears. However, I had to give it up.

点评:这一段essay具体讲述了作者凭着最初对京剧的痴迷,五年间利用业余时间刻苦训练,训练三年后被选出来为外宾表演,这些都展示出作者对京剧的热爱以及刻苦训练取得不错的成就。就在作者对未来当京剧演员的梦想充满期待并为之奋斗之时,作者入院被查出患上肾炎,医生的忠告让作者京剧演员梦成为泡影。

Several months later, I recovered from the disease. To exercisemyself, I began to swim. In fact, myteacher once told me I was not suitable to be a swimmer. But I still practicedvery hard every day. Two years later, I obtained two national certificates.However, misfortunate came to me again: I got dermatitis and was prohibited totouch water. Sadness spread over me, but just for one or two days this time. Ifigured out another sport that I could play–badminton. I joined a badminton team in a sports school. So, I wentthere practicing for two hours every afternoon. I did not miss any class. Oneyear later, I took part in a badminton competition in our district and won thethird prize in the teenager group. After I entered my senior high school, I hadto terminate the training because the sports school is too far away. But laterI always play badminton with my friends when I am free.

点评:经过数月治疗,作者肾炎痊愈。为锻炼身体,作者开始学习游泳。虽然老师认为作者先天条件存在不足,但作者依然刻苦训练,两年后获得两种泳姿的国家认证证书。然而,厄运再次光临——作者患皮肤病,医生建议不宜接触水。但悲伤仅笼罩作者一、两天,作者就确定了下一个奋斗目标——打羽毛球。一年紧张训练之后,作者就在区里的羽毛球比赛少年组里获得三等奖。进入高中之后,由于离体校较远,作者不得不放弃羽毛球训练。严格意义讲,这第三次放弃自己的爱好称不上是misfortune所为,但也确实属不得已而为之的无奈之举。但也并非完全放弃,闲暇时,作者经常与朋友打羽毛球。

Sometimes I think I am not a lucky person, because misfortunealways visits me. I had to give up my Peking Opera dream first, and then myswimmer dream. However, I also feel great when I realize that I used to be awonderful Opera actress, a swimmer with two national certificates and a goodbadminton player. Furthermore, I find I can do everything well as long as I amdetermined to do it. And I am quite sure I will succeed a lot in the future.

点评:前面讲述的三个作者为之不懈努力奋斗的目标,最终都不得不忍痛割舍,这自然而然让作者联想是命运捉弄为难自己——有时候认为自己不幸运,因为厄运时常降临自己身上,先后不得不放弃京剧梦、游泳梦。但作者也充分认识到她的优秀——曾是一名优秀的京剧演员,一名拥有两张国家证书的游泳运动员,一名优秀的羽毛球选手,都与这些厄运密切相连。作者更加认识到自己性格的一个特点——只要下决心去做,任何事都会做得出色。而这也让作者确信自己未来会不断成功。至此,一个不畏厄运挑战、努力前行追求卓越、对前途充满信心的学生形象跃然纸上。

读过这篇essay后,相信同学们一定会对这名同学深感敬佩,美国大学招生官看到此文也会有同感。每年大学申请季节,紧张忙碌的不仅仅是那些申请学生,美国大学招生官们同样也是非常辛苦地阅读学生的申请材料。在阅读申请材料过程中,招生官们普遍认为最享受的是阅读学生撰写的申请essay。这些招生官认为,阅读学生写出来的essay是在与学生进行无声的对话,从中感受学生是怎样的一个人,借此考察学生的个性、才能、成长经历,从中寻找学生的亮点,探究其成长的轨迹,进而判断学生未来的发展潜力。因而,对申请学生来讲,撰写申请essay,实际上是美国大学提供给申请学生的一个机会,一个向录取官员展示鲜活自我、强调突出个人亮点的机会。如果一篇申请essay中没有展示出申请学生的某个或某些亮点,那么这篇申请essay就没有任何实际意义。期望同学们一定要认真把握这个能够给录取官员留下深刻印象的机会,在撰写申请essay时,要极力通过事例突出个人的优秀经历、才能、个性,多角度展现自身亮点。上面那篇essay不仅展示了那名学生拥有深厚的京剧方面的知识和才艺、优秀的游泳和羽毛球才能,而且通过她的这些经历展示她是一个勇敢乐观面对挫折,持续刻苦努力追求卓越的一名学生。这些个性预示她将来能够取得更多更大的成功,而这正是美国名校招生官希望在学生身上看到的。

通过上述对于Topic of Your Choice写作思路的讲解后,各位是否也都学会了如何去选择一个有趣的essay主题呢?在这篇essay范文当中,作者将个性与经历相结合着实是一个不错的亮点,让美国大学的招生老师们眼前一亮,觉得十分的新奇,便会对这篇essay有着非常不错的评价。




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